QUARANTINE DAY 25 my bored teenage son is now giving comments on my op-ed drafts. and he is out for blood.
"no."
"what does this add? delete"
"this drags on and is boring"
"i think every instance of you using parentheses should be cut and you should never do it again." 1/
"no."
"what does this add? delete"
"this drags on and is boring"
"i think every instance of you using parentheses should be cut and you should never do it again." 1/
"you have a citation for everything but this. provide evidence"
"this really adds nothing in my opinion except makes it seem like you hate young people"
"Which mathematicians and public health officials support this idea?"
my son @liamcs10 on grammar and style as he gives my drafts the old red pen treatment:
"fix."
"playstation is one word."
"these long lists you have in about every paragraph could be shortened. Does it really add critical value?"
"Parentheses are so annoying for the reader"
"fix."
"playstation is one word."
"these long lists you have in about every paragraph could be shortened. Does it really add critical value?"
"Parentheses are so annoying for the reader"
my son @liamcs10 on causal inference as he shreds my writing.
"This assumes all else is equal. A strange assumption to make."
"Your argument works if this were a game of Civilization or a simulation with controlled variables. However this is not the case."
"This assumes all else is equal. A strange assumption to make."
"Your argument works if this were a game of Civilization or a simulation with controlled variables. However this is not the case."
my teen son @liamcs10 on redunancy, while editing my drafts (@Worse_Reviewer would be proud)
"what does this add? delete"
"I'm pretty sure you've already made this point."
"what does this add here. You've already said this"
"what does this add? delete"
"I'm pretty sure you've already made this point."
"what does this add here. You've already said this"
my son @liamcs10 on appropriate citations as he rips into my drafts. @IRHotTakes @ArafatKabirUpol @JaeyeBaek @noroskyj @fowler_catie
"is this a fact? Don't present things as facts if they aren't"
"you have a citation for everything but this. provide evidence"
"cockamemy"
"is this a fact? Don't present things as facts if they aren't"
"you have a citation for everything but this. provide evidence"
"cockamemy"
@liamcs10 on poor use of colloquialism
"i'm not sure the phrase 'good propaganda campaign' should show up anywhere in an elite policy journal"
"i'm not sure the phrase 'good propaganda campaign' should show up anywhere in an elite policy journal"
and my favorites:
on messaging: "sensationalist title may get clicks but won't change minds"
on my use of the term 'nihilism': "god is dead."
on messaging: "sensationalist title may get clicks but won't change minds"
on my use of the term 'nihilism': "god is dead."
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