Write something that pulls the reader down your page:
9/ Avoid “landing page words”
Unlock, unleash, enhance, empower, supercharge, etc.
Real people don't use them.
10/ Write scannable copy:
11/ Kill adverbs. Kill adjectives.
They're flowery. They're vague. They try too hard:
12/ Stories make you memorable
I couldn't list The Ten Commandments. I could tell you what happened to Adam and Eve:
13/ Fence sitters don't buy
Go to the edge:
14/ More periods, fewer commas
Periods mean short sentences. We like short sentences.
Commas mean long, painful sentences, which New Yorker writers think are clever, but real people find torturous, because they wind on and on without actually saying anything.
Most cold emails suck. Ryan sends 20,000 every week and gets thousands of replies.
I messaged him. Here's how it works...
Step 1 — Find hot leads
Why do cold emails suck? Well, they're hopelessly untargeted.
The same junk goes out to 1000's of prospects all with different needs.
The trick is to scrape a tighter group of prospects all with similar needs:
• Run a SEO agency? Scrape companies hiring SEOs.
• Sell exec coaching? Scrape companies who've just raised money
• Jet insurer? Scrape FAA registrations for new jets.
1/ When Loom launched in 2016 it was called OpenVid. And it was just another “easy-to-use screen recorder”.
At the time all screen recorders walked the same and talked the same. No opinions, no personality.
2/ Until, one day, Loom came up with a point of view:
1. “The way remote teams communicate sucks.” 2. “Meetings are boring. Calls drag on. Email lacks personality.” 3. “The solution? Async video messaging.”