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Notion has over 30 million users and a $10 billion valuation.

They dominate by using storytelling on their landing pages.

Specifically Dan Harmon’s Story Circle framework.

Let's break down how Notion uses the Story Circle to get millions of new users on board: Image
Dan Harmon’s Story Circle framework (for your landing page):

1. Protagonist: Customer
2. Need: Desire
3. Go: Your landing page
4. Search: Landing page content.
5. Find: CTA
6. Take: The price
7. Return: Back to daily life
8. Change: Life is better with product
1/ Protagonist

Notion’s Landing Page protagonist is clear.

It’s you. Image
2/ The Need:

This is detailed throughout the landing page.

The main need is clear:

Better, faster, more organized work. Image
3/ Go: The Landing Page

Their landing page is easy to read:
• 1 CTA
• 1 column
• 1 decision to make... 👇

To start the journey or not. Image
4/ Search: Landing Page Content

The protagonist searches the page to see if Notion will solve their problems.

Notion nails your concern in 1 sentence: “Finally, all your work in one place”

And provides screenshots of 4 key features:
• Docs
• Wikis
• Projects
• Notion AI Image
5/ Find: CTA

“Get Notion Free” is right at the top for those ready to go.

Along with another CTA at the bottom.

Those who need more convincing, keep scrolling. Image
6/ Take: The Price

What does it cost to join Notion?

Notion is free. The cost is the learning curve.

To win people over, they provide in-depth details about specific pain points in specific situations.

And slap you in the face with social proof. Image
7/ Return to Daily Life

"So how am I actually going to use this thing?"

Notion lays out all of their top templates for daily use cases. Image
8/ Change: How has life changed?

The reader wants to see how Notion is going to improve their life.

Best time to use testimonials.

Notion provides a few powerful snippets. Image
And that's it!

Take a page from Notion's playbook.

Use Dan Harmon's Story Circle in your next landing page. Image
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You only get a few seconds to capture your reader's attention.

Hook 'em in with these 10 micro-copywriting frameworks:
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O: Highlight the outcome.

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This story has stuck with me for years 👇

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Inside the small boat were several large yellowfin tuna.

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The fisherman proudly replied,

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Be generous when writing copy (write as much as you want).

Be ruthless when editing copy (edit as if it costs you money).
Transition Words:

Stop writing boring copy.

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Here are 7 reasons why it worked (and how you can replicate it):
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Every line transitions perfectly into the next line.

Note: Read the tweet first, then the full image.

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Not a novel concept by any stretch...

But executed perfectly here.

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