Thread by @asktoeknee

Congrats @SamDeBrule @kevinthau @sparkcapital!

A well crafted presentation. Best I've seen recently.

But I think you can push it a little further next round.

I run a pitch design studio, and we audited your deck for fun.

Here are 6 opportunities to make it more compelling.

Our story framework informs our recommendations.

We use it to break down content into components.

It's our venture spin on the Story Circle, a timeless structure.

Let's start with the great things you're doing.

World-class type and clever branding elements.

Great data. Clear copy. Thorough.

But we think you could dial up the narrative.

1. Move components to create a more intuitive #story.

2. Visualize the #marketsize.

3. Bring us into the room mid #discovery.

4. Ideal testimonials, but I glossed over them. Give #press space.

5. Share a technical challenge you'll overcome. #growth

6. Show your #northstar.

How might we approach beefing up the motive?

We'd try to illustrate the dollar amount and put things into perspective.

Maybe something like this.

Excellent product and deck. Congrats again!

We're new to Twitter and want to get our name out there.

We thought what better way than to show what we do.

If you're fundraising, reach out!

asktony.xyz

#pitchdeck #investordeck #venturecapital #fundraising #design

Shout to @heylizelle for the nudge on this. Had a blast auditing @heyday_hq’s pitch deck. More to come!